How NOT To Write (Thog’s Masterclass )

These are published authors.

THOG’S MASTERCLASS

Facial Dept.:
‘Her nose held the memory of Spanish conquistadors. Her skin was the color of leaves just starting to turn. And beneath her dark eyes were full lips that looked as if they’d never smiled.’
(Weston Ochse, Grunt Life, 2014)

Dept of Inspiration.:
‘An idea suddenly gurgled up in her mind.’
(Kate White, Hush, 2010)

Was It Perhaps Circular?
‘Madame Rosa’s voice dropped to a whisper. “I took Victor’s hand to read his palm. It was the life-line, Doctor … I could see no end to it. They must be immortal, those Brains!”‘
(Sidney J. Bounds, The Robot Brains, 1958)

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3 Responses to How NOT To Write (Thog’s Masterclass )

  1. A.C. Villanueva says:

    There’s nothing wrong with the first of these examples, in my opinion.

  2. You can’t hold things in your nose. That makes people laugh.

  3. Avoid making body parts do things on their own.

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