Weird Writing From Published Authors

roll your eyesOn The One Hand … ‘”There is one datum I can adduce, I believe,’ said Lebret, scratching his beard with his left hand and manoeuvring a cigarette out of its case with his left …” (Adam Roberts, Twenty Trillion Leagues under the Sea, 2014)

Eyeballs in the Sky. “His eyes seemed to disconnect themselves.” (Robert Moore Williams, To the End of Time, July 1950 Super Science Stories)

Easily Amused Corpse Dept. “For half an hour they left the man on his bench. His dead eyes were open and seemed to smile slightly at a photograph of the Minister of Rest and Culture.” (John Blackburn, A Scent of New-Mown Hay, 1958) Okay, okay, the era of the editorial three-martini lunch?

Dept of Guilt. “… This planet and its creatures! The erection/detumescence of each instant he’d shared with them lay on his awareness with scalding pressure. He felt like a bivalve at the tide-edge of the universe. History was collapsing within him and he could only remember the ages of his crime …” (Frank Herbert, The Heaven Makers, 1968) ) Oh no, not the Dune author, Frank Herbert– oh well, twas the 60’s–did he drink three martinis also, with his editor?

More from The Gap into Madness: Chaos and Order by Stephen R. Donaldson, 1994

“The Gap into Clench and Aura.”
“Angus’ heart clenched in a grimace which didn’t show on his face.”
“Her shoulders hunched into a clench of disgust, which she deflected into a shrug.”
“Nick let out a clenched laugh.”
“Above his open mouth, his eyes blinked like cries.”
“His aura yowled of furies that didn’t show on his face.”
“The smears on his lenses refracted his blue gaze into streams of hope and apprehension.”
“His eyes slid off as if they’d lost their grip.”
“The air had grown viscid with mortality.”

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Thinking of writing your novel in omniscient point of view)? Forget it.

If you’re thinking of writing your novel in omniscient POV (point of view), forget it. Writers who use omniscient POV don’t challenge themselves to write in a more intimate style, which takes more work and thought.

In first person or third person limited the reader lives inside the head and heart of the character “on stage”. With omniscient the reader is an onlooker, in the audience, trying to identify with the character at a distance.

Some storytellers are so great at their craft, like Dickens and others from the past, you don’t notice the distance. But today’s writers, using today’s writing convents, must use the most intimate first and third person POVs with interior monologue if they want to get published. The writing needs to seduce editors in publishing houses, and then the readers.

Renni Browne and Shelly Lowenkopf, both of whom have extensive experience with book publishers, appear to regard the use of omniscient point of view as a combination of being dated and offering potential confusion to the reader.

Shelly has come forth to suggest that omniscient sends a signal to the reader that you’re going back to the early days of the twentieth century and such tropes as the HIBK, or Had I But Known times. He argues to his students that omniscient produces speed bumps. Close first, third and multiple POV get the story told.

Renni, who was once senior editor at the great literary house of Norton, claims omniscient tends to build a wall between the reader and the character, making it too easy for the author to slip in the occasional hand-held sign that is in fact a stage direction.

I so agree with them. When deciding to write in omniscient POV, the author takes the less challenging path. When I pick up a published novel that’s written in omniscient, I’m immediately disappointed. Why did the writer take this path and who let her get published if this is a first novel? Who’s speaking? The author of course.

I don’t want the author to speak to me. I want the characters to speak to me, to let me know what that character hears, sees, smells, tastes, guesses, experiences, doubts, believes. I want the character to “show me” not “tell me.” As though I, the reader, lived inside the head of the POV character.

The camera is inside that character’s head. Not the author’s. The author must be invisible to me, must not intervene. When I read a query from a writer who wants my agency to represent him and I discover they’ve written in omniscient, I stop reading. I know that writer must master more skills. Next.

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The Burden of Your Novel’s Opening Scene by C. S. Lakin

Think of your novel as a gold mine, with a mother lode resting deep in the heart of a mountain. In order to get to that treasure, you have to build a sturdy framework as you dig into all that dirt and rock. You don’t want the mine to collapse on your head—that would spell disaster.

Now think about the entrance to the mine, which is particularly important to attend to. All the bracing and construction that follows will be built off that initial structure. So if it’s flawed or built with flimsy materials . . . well, we’re back to disaster.

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David Farland’s Daily Kick in the Pants—Telescoping Penetration

“One book that I frequently recommend for writers is Orson Scott Card’s Character and Viewpoint. I do it for a number of reasons. First, Scott looks at such issues as whether to write a novel in first person, second, or third; he also looks at past, present, and future tense…” READ MORE

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Some Things You Should Know about Story (Six, to Be Precise)

By Shelly Lowenkopf

(1) Whose story is it?

A dramatic work has only one central character. There may be secondary characters of equal importance to the overall narrative, but in the vast majority of literary accomplishments from Dracula to Candide, Tootsie to Richard III, Madame Bovary to Priscilla, Queen of the Desert, there is only one central character. This character’s motive—what he/she wants in terms of a goal or objective–drives the story. This is the engine, the seminal force of the action. Action is the operant word in story, fluid and unrelenting, not to be confused with activity, which is often casual and directionless. The central character’s determination to follow what is often an obsessive course propels the action. This energy connects us to the central character. This dominant skein in a story commands our attention.

This imperative may also be subtle. Take Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet; this great love story is driven by Romeo, who makes all the major decisions as well as being the primary eponymous character. Juliet has an important role, but if she were the central character, she’d still be standing on the balcony wondering where Romeo is.   Romeo, Romeo, wherefore art thou, Romeo? No doubt at all where Rome is. He stands at the center of the story.

If you look at the central character’s story, you’ll remain focused on that principle. You won’t succumb to the temptation to jump out of that character’s story and into another because you’re bored or stuck. Writers often introduce other characters because they haven’t made those characters already on stage interesting enough, or given them a sufficiently inventive plot to engage and maintain an audience’s undivided attention.

(2)       What is the story about?

Imagine a TV Guide synopsis of Hamlet: “Gloomy Dane pursues his father’s assassin.” Sounds stupid, that, but you need to know the shape of the story you’re going to tell, or at least have a rough idea of the beginning, middle, and end of your story. Hold these points loosely but firmly in your mind—allowing room for surprise, for yourself as well as the audience. You may alter your original devices along the way, inspire ideas hitherto no more than shadows on your unconscious mind–but a sense of direction that isn’t completely prefigured can be useful, if only to keep you from getting lost. This also forces you to look at the story as a deliberate sequence of dramatic events–not just an uneventful state of being. Not one damn thing after another, but one damn thing because of another. Remember, this is drama, not a group of people sitting around chatting about the price of corn futures. Something happens, and that event has to happen dramatically in order to change the characters’ lives and keep the audience in a state of excited anticipation.

This leads to another question under the same heading: why is this day different to all other days? Because this difference, this dramatic difference, changes a desultory state of being into a real story. Let’s illustrate “state of being”: you come home and eat your supper and your mother says do your homework and you do your homework and you wish you could watch television, but you can’t because watching t .v.’s against the house rules, so you don’t do a good job on your homework and you eat your supper, which is a boring sandwich, then you go to bed. These activities are a state of being, activities; they are not yet a dramatic sequence of events.

Let’s invent a dramatic sequence: you come home to do your homework and you can’t do it. It’s too hard. You ignore your mother, then turn on the TV. A strange figure on the screen interrupts the regular program. He speaks directly to you; “Hi there! Know that difficult question in your homework? What would you say if I gave you the answer—and we didn’t tell anyone where you got this answer?

Bingo! Curtain up! Lights – Camera – Action! This day is now different from all other days. Something has disrupted the status quo. Enter the plot, which immediately thickens. The boy is morally conflicted. Is this honest? Is it fair? Will he be found out? Or does he even care, if it means he can play for his team next day and score the winning goal? You now have a workable dramatic sequence.

3. (a) What is the Prize (to be won) and (b) the Price (to be paid)?

In drama, there is always a prize–something to be won by the central character. Because there’s a prize to be won, there’s also a price to be paid–something to be lost. No gain without pain. In the play (and film) Driving Miss Daisy, Miss Daisy wins her African-American chauffeur (Hoke) as a loving friend–but loses her independence to infirmity and old age. The prize is often related to what the central character wants, but isn’t always the same thing. What happens in many plays is that the central character both loses what seems most valuable, but discovers something in the process that is even more valuable. Consider Nora in Ibsen’s A Doll’s House. What does she want? She wants to protect her husband and keep her secret about the loan she had to tell a lie to get–and is now trying to make good to the bank. The “prize” turns out to be freedom from her oppressive, stultifying marriage. The price? She gives up her illusions about her husband and learns (we hope) to survive on her own. No mean feat in the repressive society of Ibsen’s nineteenth century Norway.

Freedom is the prize in many dramatic works—another is the discovery (by the central character) of something he/she could have known all along but for some reason didn’t. The emotional impact of this discovery is so powerful that nothing will ever be the same for the characters again. It creates the denouement of the story.

(4) Why should we care?

Of all the questions, this one yields the most significant examples. Again, Miss Daisy. Why do we care about this grumpy old Jewish lady? The main reason: you know in your heart that her dilemma will someday become your dilemma. We are all going to grow old; many of us are going to have to depend on other people when that happens.   In drama, we care about people who seem, in spite of much evidence to the contrary, to be human. To have impulses we can comprehend and even, sometimes, inexplicably, excuse. Let’s take an extreme example: Hannibal Lecter in The Silence of the Lambs. How can you have anything but loathing for somebody who eats human flesh? Yet we end up drawn to Hannibal, just as FBI investigator (Clarice Starling) is. Well, we’ve all wanted to “consume” people metaphorically—either because we love them or because we hate them. Remember, Hannibal helps Agent Starling achieve her goal, and, when she is asked: “How can be sure Hannibal won’t come after you?” she replies: “Because he says the world is a better place with me in it.” So we see that Hannibal, like Frankenstein, is a monster with human feelings.   Hamlet, self-obsessed and neurotically conflicted as he is, ultimately engages our empathy by his sheer determination to confirm the identity of his father’s murderer and exact revenge. He overcomes our impatience with his inability to make a decision and his selfish indifference to poor Ophelia. He reminds us of ourselves in our darkest moments of emotional turmoil.

There was a boy at junior high school who remarked: “I don’t think Darth Vader is such a bad guy.” I asked him, “ How do you know that?” He said, “It’s that mask he wears. He’s covering who he really is. You know that something bad has happened to him.”

The most common response from students to “Why do you care?” is that you care because the characters stand up for what they believe in. They not only believe something, even if what they believe isn’t necessarily right, they also stand up for it. They have the courage of their convictions and refuse to be talked out of something they believe is right.

  1. What is s the major dramatic question? (MDQ)

In one sense, this reprises the second question, “What is this story about?” Will Hamlet avenge his father’s murder? Will Miss Daisy accept Hoke as her protector when she can no longer take care of herself?   The second question echoes the first: “Whose story is it?” In Driving Miss Daisy you’ve got an elderly woman who’s scared of growing old and a black man who’s sorely in need of a weekly wage. They live in the South, where the writer himself was raised, so he knows about racial tension. Black people and white people are still separate, even if the law says they’re equal. The point is, this is the social construct the writer has to deal with in real terms. He can’t step outside that social arena. Miss Daisy can’t suddenly behave as if she’s shopping in the Outer Hebrides. She’s in a racially segregated neighborhood in Alabama.

The Major Dramatic Question functions best when kept in mind from the beginning because MDQ keeps you planted in the basic concept of the story. The danger is always that we jump out of our chosen arena and lose focus on our original concept.

(6)       Who are you?

In other words: What do you, the writer, think, feel, and believe? What are your values? You can’t impose your values on characters who wouldn’t have them, but you can present your values in the context of the whole. Chances are there’s a moral dilemma at the core of your story. What do you as the architect of this narrative bring to it—of yourself and your deepest convictions? What has made you sit down to write the narrative in the first place? Take Hamlet for example. There are hundreds of theories about why Shakespeare wrote Hamlet, but he knew for a fact that a woman called Ophelia drowned herself in the River Avon very shortly before he wrote Hamlet and that his own son, who died when he was very young, was called Hamlet. Thus the world of the writer is in the play in a very significant way. What you, the writer, have seen and learned from your own life is going to affect everything you write.

Experience steers the writer towards what she/he wants the play to say, how she/he wants the audience to feel when they leave the theatre, and what questions she/he wants them to ask. So ask yourself: what would you like to happen that might change human history in some small but personal way? What angers you? What delights you? What frightens you? Who are you?

This question links back to the first one, “Whose story is it?” because the central character will be a vehicle, whether you know it or not, for ideas and convictions of your own. This is the ongoing pleasure and challenge of writing for performance. It’s a way to sing the song you were born to sing, to be seen for who you are. To be heard. To make the vital difference. Be brash, be bold—but don’t insert yourself so strongly into the consciousness of the audience that you interrupt the continuum of objectivity that is essentially what engrosses the spectator. This plea for virtuosity and power becomes the very thing that characterized Baroque Art. This art penetrated the intellect not via the mind but via the emotions. So don’t be afraid to thumb your nose at the crowd gawping open-mouthed from the bleachers below and take a wild leap into the void.   Someone, who kayaked over Niagara, said that after the terrifying roar of water filling his ears when he approached the edge, he experienced a great silence while the torrent bore him down into the depths. The silence holds us, rapt and transfixed.

As Yogi Berra said: When you come to a fork in the road—take it.

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David Farland’s Daily Kick in the Pants–Predicting a Bestseller

Researchers created a computer program to study stylistic similarities between books, to see if stylistic similarities can be used as predictors of success. Read what David Farland said about their findings.

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Bill Flanagan of the grammar police on “I and me”

Time now for a public service announcement from first-person-singular-pronoun policeman Bill Flanagan of VH1:

I know it sounds snobby to point this out, but in the last 10 or 15 years, millions of intelligent English-speaking people have become flummoxed by when to use “I,” and when to use “me.” You hear it all the time: READ MORE

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